Band 5+: Why do some people feel they need to own thing?

Your pronunciation is average. It is understandable but not always accurate. Focusing on the rhythm and stress patterns of English could prove beneficial.

The answer is understandable and touches upon several reasons why people want to own things. However, the response could benefit from more in-depth exploration of each reason and a more sophisticated analysis of the underlying psychological or sociological factors. Consider exploring concepts like social status, security, and personal identity in relation to material possessions.

The answer is understandable, but there's a lack of fluency. The repetition of "do our things" is distracting and shows a lack of control over expression. Improving fluency would involve planning the answer more carefully and practicing smoother transitions between ideas. The structure is somewhat disorganized; a clearer introduction and conclusion would improve coherence.

The vocabulary is adequate but not particularly sophisticated. Words like "respectable life" and "worked really hard" are quite common. Using more precise and nuanced vocabulary would enhance the answer. For example, instead of "respectable life," consider using terms like "comfortable life" or "a life of independence." The phrase "do our things" is unclear and needs replacement with more precise language.

There are several grammatical errors, particularly the repeated use of "do our things." The sentence structure is sometimes awkward and unclear. The pronoun usage is inconsistent. While the basic grammar is understandable, improving accuracy and range would significantly improve the score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun usage. Practice using a wider range of grammatical structures, such as complex sentences and passive voice, to demonstrate grammatical control.