Band 4+: a line graph to show the number of earthquake in a year

The report addresses the main trends and provides an overview of the data. However, there are some inaccuracies in the description of the trends; for example, the report mentions a 'steady increase' through two seasons, but the data shows a jump from Spring to Summer and then to Autumn. Additionally, the concluding statement regarding a 'tendency over years' is an over-interpretation, as the graph only represents a single year and does not provide longitudinal data. To improve, ensure that descriptions of trends strictly align with the data points provided and avoid making inferences about time periods not shown in the visual. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report follows a logical structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and imprecise transitions. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated cohesive devices and ensure that each sentence flows naturally into the next. Avoid using personal pronouns like 'we' or 'us', as academic reports should maintain an objective, third-person tone.

The vocabulary used is somewhat repetitive and contains several inaccuracies in word choice (e.g., 'amount' and 'quantity' are generally used for uncountable nouns, whereas 'number' is more appropriate for countable earthquakes). There are also spelling errors such as 'quanity'. To reach a higher band, aim for a wider range of precise academic vocabulary and ensure that word choices accurately reflect the data being described (e.g., using 'peaked' instead of 'approach its peak').

The report demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, and there are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'quanity keep', 'it approach') and article usage. There are also issues with sentence structure, such as comma splices. To improve, practice using a variety of complex sentence structures and pay close attention to singular/plural agreement and verb tenses to ensure accuracy throughout the report.