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Band 5+: During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job Begin as follows: Dear ... ,

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Dear Ronaldo,

I am writing to you to search for jobs in your one of the restaurants.

I hope that you can remember me who has met you during a plane journey last month. I sit next to you. We both has a wonderful discussion about your business. You also have shared your Journey of business, your struggles and how to overcome those. When I have shared about my skills and abilities, you have listened patiently and told me where at your restaurant you need a marketing manager with experience. For this post you told me to contact you without hesitation.

According to our conversation, I have decided to request you for a job opportunity in your team. I have completed bachelor degree in marketing at University of Jaffna. I have been working as a marketing manager for one year at a supermarket. So I want to more hands on experience in marketing field and follow my masters in that field.

With that experience that I have got at the super market and my qualifications what I have completed for my graduation,I hope that I will be the suitable person for your requirements.

I look forward your reply I will be grateful if you offer that opportunity.

Thank you

Yours faithfully

Ms.John

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

marketing: 4

experience: 3

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Task Response

The letter adequately addresses all parts of the task, reminding the businessman of their meeting, stating the job interest, and explaining suitability. There are some minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, but overall the letter is clear and well-organized. To improve, focus on refining sentence structure and ensuring accurate grammar and word choice.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is generally clear, but the flow of ideas could be improved. Consider using more effective transitions between paragraphs to enhance coherence. For example, clearly link your skills and experiences to the requirements of the marketing manager position you're interested in. Also, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, clear idea to improve readability.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is adequate but could be more precise and varied. Instead of using general phrases like 'wonderful discussion,' try to incorporate more specific and descriptive language to showcase your communication skills. Expanding your range of vocabulary will make your letter more engaging and demonstrate a better command of the English language.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and article usage ('a,' 'an,' 'the'). For example, phrases like 'I sit next to you' should be 'I sat next to you,' and 'search for jobs in your one of the restaurants' should be 'search for jobs in one of your restaurants.' Proofreading carefully and focusing on basic grammar rules will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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