Band 5+: The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The report covers the main trends and key features of the data, providing a reasonable overview of the changes in household spending percentages between 1995 and 2011. However, there's room for improvement in terms of detail and accuracy. For instance, the increase in medicine spending is noted, but the actual percentage for 2011 is 11%, not 9% as stated. Additionally, while the report mentions the decline in clothing spending, quantifying this change with specific percentages would enhance the analysis. To improve, focus on providing more precise data references and ensuring all key figures are accurately represented. Also, consider adding comparative statements to highlight the magnitude of changes between categories. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report demonstrates an adequate attempt to organize the information, but the flow could be improved. The overview is present but could be more insightful. The body paragraphs present the data, but transitions between sentences and ideas could be smoother. Consider using cohesive devices more effectively to link ideas and improve the overall flow. Paragraphing is generally acceptable, but ensure each paragraph focuses on a clear aspect of the data.

The vocabulary used is generally appropriate, but there's room for improvement in terms of variety and precision. Words like 'smooth decline,' 'noticeably,' and 'minimal growth' are adequate but could be replaced with more descriptive and sophisticated alternatives. Try to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and changes more accurately. For example, instead of 'went down significantly,' you could use 'decreased substantially' or 'declined considerably.'

The report contains several grammatical errors and phrasing issues that affect clarity. Sentences like 'looking at household necessity, this section faced a minimal growth from 9% to 12% by the end of the period' need restructuring for better grammatical accuracy and clarity. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and sentence structure. Proofread carefully to eliminate these errors and improve the overall grammatical accuracy.