Band 5+: The graph below shows radio amd television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The report adequately covers the main features of the graph, correctly identifying the overall trends for both radio and television audiences. It makes relevant comparisons between the two media and includes specific data points. However, there are some minor omissions and lapses in detail, such as not mentioning the time frame (October to December 1992) and the slight dip in radio audiences after the morning peak. Additionally, the phrasing could be more precise and varied, and the structure could be improved with clearer paragraphing. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets the task requirements. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, but the flow is disrupted by abrupt transitions and incomplete sentences. For example, 'Television started from 0% in the morning then increased gradually to approximately 20% at afternoon .Before growing dramatically to around 45% in the evening.' contains a period before 'Before' that breaks the sentence. Additionally, the use of 'While' at the start of a sentence is informal and creates a choppy effect. To improve, use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast,' or 'Meanwhile,' and ensure each sentence is complete and logically connected to the next. Paragraphing could be more skillfully managed by grouping related information and using clear topic sentences.

The report uses a limited range of vocabulary, with some repetition of words like 'dropped' and 'increased'. There are also awkward phrasings such as 'radio is people's favorite' and 'most audience starts watching'. To achieve a higher score, use a wider variety of precise terms (e.g., 'peaked', 'declined', 'remained steady') and more natural collocations (e.g., 'the majority of the audience'). Additionally, avoid informal language like 'people's favorite' in academic writing. The report demonstrates adequate control but lacks the sophistication expected for a high band score.

The report contains several grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. For instance, 'at afternoon' should be 'in the afternoon', and 'Then dropped considerably to 0% at midnight' is a sentence fragment. There is also a missing space after the period in 'afternoon .Before'. The use of 'While' as a conjunction is incorrect in this context. To improve, focus on sentence structure, ensuring each sentence has a subject and verb, and use a wider range of grammatical structures (e.g., complex sentences with subordinate clauses). Punctuation, especially commas and periods, needs careful attention to enhance readability.