Band 5+: The graph below shows the percentage of people unemployed in the total labour workforce across 9 countries in 1994 and 2004.

The report addresses the task by describing the unemployment rates for the nine countries in 1994 and 2004, and it attempts to highlight key trends such as decreases in Ireland, Italy, Canada, the UK, and the USA, and increases in Poland, Germany, Australia, and Japan. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions that detract from the task achievement. For example, the report incorrectly states that the UK and Ireland both declined to 5% in 2004 (Ireland was 4.4%, UK was 4.7%), and it misstates the USA rate in 1994 as 7.2% (it was 6%). Additionally, the description of Australia and Japan is vague and contains errors (Australia's rate increased from 7.2% to 4.7%, which is a decrease, not an increase). The report also lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is expected in Task 1. To improve, focus on accurately presenting the data, providing a clear overview of the overall pattern (e.g., most countries saw decreases except Poland and Germany), and ensuring all key figures are correctly reported. Proofreading for spelling and grammatical errors would also enhance clarity.

The report attempts to organize information by country groups, but the flow is disrupted by unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. For example, the phrase 'At the same time decreasing was in UK and Ireland' is confusing. The conclusion paragraph mixes trends without clear logical links. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct trend (e.g., decreases vs. increases). Use cohesive devices like 'in contrast,' 'similarly,' or 'overall' to guide the reader.

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive (e.g., 'increased,' 'decreased' used multiple times). There are spelling errors ('signigicant,' 'deacreasing,' 'falled') and awkward phrasing ('the rate in both country was around 3%'). To improve, use a wider range of synonyms (e.g., 'rose,' 'declined,' 'plummeted,' 'surged') and more precise terms (e.g., 'workforce' instead of 'labour workfroce'). Avoid informal expressions like 'we can see.' Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('Graphs shows'), incorrect verb forms ('falled,' 'rised'), and missing articles ('the rate in both country'). Punctuation is inconsistent (e.g., missing commas after introductory phrases). To improve, practice using past tense correctly for completed actions, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use articles ('a,' 'an,' 'the') appropriately. Vary sentence structures by using complex sentences with subordinate clauses.