Pie Chart

Band 6+: The pie charts below show the percentage distribution of online sales across different product categories in a retail showroom in Kathmandu in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The image displays two pie charts titled 'Online Sales for Retail Showroom in Kathmandu in 2015 & 2020'. The 2015 chart shows sales percentages for four categories: Furniture at 18%, Clothing at 35%, Cosmetic at 22%, and Food items at 25%. The 2020 chart shows Furniture at 23%, Clothing at 30%, Cosmetic at 32%, and Food items at 15%.

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The two pie charts compares the proportion distribution of e-commerce sales across various products in a retail showroom in Kathmandu in the year 2015 and 2020. For two of the products, it is evident that over this time frame there was singnificant change in their proportion of online purchase.

At 35% we can see that the clothing sector accounted for the majority of online shopping in 2015, but this percentage had dropped to 30% by 2020. Across the same five-year period, as increasing number of people chose to purchase cosmatic, we can see that purchase went from just 22% to 32%, making the retail sector with the highest overall share of the online market .

In 2015, the food items boosted an impressive 25% of total online sales in Kathmandu. However, by 2020, the figure had fallen considerably to 15%. Interestingly, online sales of furniture eventually overtook sales of food items, although furniture still represented only 15% of the market.

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

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sales: 4

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Task Response

The report addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the pie charts and making relevant comparisons. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the report mentions five-year period while the time frame is actually five years. Also, the report states that cosmetic sector has the highest overall share of the online market, which is not entirely accurate as it only has the highest share in 2020. To improve, ensure all data is accurately represented and avoid minor inaccuracies.

Coherence & Cohesion

The report is generally well-organized, with a clear introduction and a logical flow of information. However, there are a few instances where the connection between sentences could be smoother. For example, in the second paragraph, the transition between the clothing sector and the cosmetic sector could be improved. Also, the final sentence feels a bit disconnected from the previous discussion about food items. Consider using transition words or phrases to enhance the coherence between ideas. Paragraphing is generally well-managed, but ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the data.

Lexical Resource

The report demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, appropriate for the task. Terms like 'proportion distribution,' 'accounted for the majority,' and 'boosted an impressive' are used effectively. However, there's room to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary to elevate the writing further. For instance, instead of 'significant change,' consider using more precise terms like 'notable shift' or 'substantial variation.' Also, be mindful of using the correct form of words (e.g., 'cosmetic' instead of 'cosmatic').

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The report exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are noticeable grammatical errors that affect the clarity and accuracy of the writing. For example, 'compares' should be 'compare,' 'singnificant' should be 'significant,' 'as increasing number of people chose to purchase cosmatic' is grammatically awkward and should be rephrased (e.g., 'as an increasing number of people chose to purchase cosmetics'), and 'making the retail sector with the highest overall share of the online market' is unclear and needs restructuring. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement, correct spelling, and sentence structure to improve grammatical accuracy.

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