Band 4+: The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing some key changes in the café layout, such as the transformation of staff dining rooms into a coffee bar and takeaway area, and the addition of outdoor seating. However, it contains some inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, it mentions a 'barbecue outside' and 'recycling bins' which may not be clearly supported by the visual description, and it omits details about the serving area changes (e.g., hot meals and salad bar) and the overall layout. The report lacks a clear overview of the main changes and does not make sufficient comparisons between the before and after plans. To improve, focus on summarizing the most significant transformations, ensure accuracy with the visual information, and structure the response with a clear overview and logical grouping of changes. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a logical structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, but the flow is sometimes disrupted by unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. For example, the phrase 'only changing dividing the serving area' is confusing, and the shift from discussing the outside space to the inside building could be smoother. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect (e.g., outside changes, inside changes). Additionally, use cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'similarly', and 'while' to link ideas more effectively.

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but limited in range and precision. Words like 'got changed' and 'more bigger' are informal and repetitive. To achieve a higher score, use a wider variety of precise terms, such as 'renovated', 'converted', 'relocated', and 'expanded'. Also, avoid informal language and ensure that terms like 'recycling bins' and 'take away food' are used accurately. The report would benefit from more sophisticated collocations, such as 'undergo a redesign' or 'be repurposed as'.

The report contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. For example, 'college cafe' should be 'college café', 'remained relatively same' should be 'remained relatively the same', and 'more bigger' is a double comparative. Additionally, the sentence 'only changing dividing the serving area' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. To improve, use a wider range of sentence structures, including complex sentences with relative clauses and conditionals. Proofread for subject-verb agreement, article usage, and correct comparative forms. Punctuation is mostly correct, but some commas are missing or misused.