Band 5+: The table below shows the percentage of household and electronic goods in New Zealand in 2002 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and eporting the main features and make comparisions where relavant

The report addresses the task by summarizing the main features and making comparisons, but it contains several inaccuracies and omissions. The overall structure is clear, with an introduction and body paragraphs, but the data presented often deviates from the given figures (e.g., washing machine and TV percentages, computer, cell phone, video recorder, dishwasher, and digital camera values). Some key trends are identified, such as the increase in cell phones and digital cameras, and the decline in video recorders, but the specific numbers are incorrect. To improve, ensure that all data is accurately reported and that the report covers all items in the table. Additionally, avoid vague phrases like 'quadriple number' and use precise language. The report would benefit from a clearer overview and more accurate data presentation.

The report has a logical structure with an introduction and body paragraphs, but the flow is disrupted by unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. For example, the phrase 'In the domain of washing machine and color tv a steady usage in both years' is incomplete and lacks a clear subject. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences are run-ons or awkwardly connected. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph, employ a range of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'similarly'), and ensure each sentence is complete and logically connected to the next.

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'notably', 'gradual increase', 'conversely'), but there are several inaccuracies and limited range. For instance, 'quadriple number' is incorrect (likely meant 'quadruple'), and 'usuage' is a misspelling. The phrase 'the first and only decline' is awkward. To improve, expand your range of synonyms (e.g., 'remained stable', 'experienced a significant rise', 'witnessed a drop'), and ensure precise word choice and correct spelling. Avoid informal or vague terms like 'going all the way to'. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and limited sentence variety. Examples include subject-verb agreement ('the color tv has' should be 'the color TV have'), missing articles ('the washing machine and the color tv' is acceptable but 'the first and only decline' lacks clarity), and incorrect verb forms ('a steady usage' should be 'there was a steady usage'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. To improve, practice using a wider range of complex structures (e.g., relative clauses, conditionals), and proofread carefully for subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and punctuation.