Letter

Band 4+: You are organizing a surprise birthday party for a colleague at work and need to coordinate with other colleagues. Write a letter to your colleagues to make arrangements for the party. You should include details about: - the date, time, and location you have in mind - what kind of contribution you would like them to make (e.g., food, decorations, gifts) - how to keep the party a secret from the colleague

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Dear feiends,

i am writing to plan a surprise birthday event for anum and i need you guys to help it make a success.

I am a little confused whether we should arrange it at my home or should arrange an outdoor event ,be at a resturant or seaside.But i personally think that it would be more convenient to arrange everything in resturant and then we can visit magnificience to make it more memorable,so,lunch time will be more appropriate so we will be free by 3 pm and then we can leave for magnifiscience.

I will arrange the cake,but one of you should take care of balloons,candles and caps and the other should buy a present ,either a purse or a dress.We will divide the amount in the end.

I will invite her to the venue ,not telling that you both will be coming as well,then you two can come with the gift and balloons and cake will be brought by waiter.If you think of any better ideas,we can work on that too!

All the best,

shara

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Overall Band Score

4.5

(+/- 0.5)

Vocabulary Complexity:
A2 - Upper Beginner
Consider using more varied and advanced words.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

should: 4

arrange: 4

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Task Response

The letter adequately addresses the task by suggesting venue and time, assigning tasks, and mentioning secrecy. However, the ideas could be more developed, and the tone could be more consistently friendly and persuasive. To improve, elaborate on the reasons behind your suggestions and provide more specific details about the tasks assigned.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat unclear, and the flow of ideas could be improved. Consider using more explicit transitions between ideas to guide the reader. Paragraphing could be enhanced to separate distinct topics, such as venue suggestions, task assignments, and secrecy measures, making the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is generally simple and functional, but there's room to incorporate more varied and descriptive language to make the letter more engaging. For example, instead of 'make it more memorable,' you could use 'create lasting memories.' Expanding your vocabulary range will help convey your ideas more precisely and effectively.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Focus on improving sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading carefully for these errors will enhance the overall quality and readability of your writing.

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