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Band 5+: You are organizing a surprise birthday party for a colleague at work and need to coordinate with other colleagues. Write a letter to your colleagues to make arrangements for the party. You should include details about: - the date, time, and location you have in mind - what kind of contribution you would like them to make (e.g., food, decorations, gifts) - how to keep the party a secret from the colleague

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Hi Andi frend’s

How are you? I hope you are very well. I want to took about Andi birthday; I am organizing a surprise party on 10th of dicembre in Queenstown. I did booking in Caribe Bar (this is her favorite bar in town). We can go from 7:00 pm until 12:00 am. I think theese ours is good as she works next day.

Another hand I need help with cake and entertaimet. Can you make or bouth a cake for me? Since I have a lot of work in this moment and I do not have time. Food is done, Caribe bar make all dinner, we are goin to eat empanadas, asado and chips.

My plan for the party a secret is look for her and tell her, I need go to a town because I bouth food in Caribe Bar and you when we arrive at place said surprise.

Let me know what you think about this plan

Kiss

Delfi

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
A1 - Beginner
Aim to use more advanced language.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

caribe: 3

Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response

The letter adequately covers the requirements of the task, providing details about the party's date, time, and location, and delegating tasks. However, there are some omissions, such as not providing enough detail on how to keep the party a secret. To improve, provide more specific instructions on maintaining secrecy and proofread for grammatical errors.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat clear, but the flow of ideas could be improved. Consider using more formal transitions and structuring the letter into distinct paragraphs for each main point (date/time/location, tasks, secrecy). This will enhance readability and make it easier for the recipients to follow your plan.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is basic and sometimes inaccurate ('tooks,' 'bouth,' 'entertaimet,' 'theese ours'). Expand your vocabulary by using a thesaurus and dictionary to find more precise and varied words. For example, instead of 'make or bouth a cake,' you could say 'bake or purchase a cake.' Also, ensure correct spelling throughout the letter. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses ('I want to took'), subject-verb agreement issues ('Caribe bar make'), and awkward sentence structures ('My plan for the party a secret is look for her'). Focus on using correct verb tenses, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and constructing clearer sentences. Proofread carefully to catch and correct these errors.

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