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Band 7+: You have recently started a new hobby, but you are finding it more challenging than you expected. Write a letter to a friend who is knowledgeable about this hobby, explaining your difficulties. You should include: - What the hobby is and why you chose it - Specific challenges you are encountering - What kind of advice or help you are seeking from your friend

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Dear Mariam,

How are you doing? I am writing this letter to update you on the new hobby I just started that I really enjoy.

It’s crocheting, I have always wanted to learn it. I followed my sister to the market, I saw few colorful yarns and I decided to buy some and make something nice with it.

I really like it because it keeps me busy and I get to create different designs with it, I can make caps and bags now. I find it very interesting that I can even make blankets from it. I enjoy it so much, It keeps me away from my phone and reduces my screen time.

I would love you to come over next week Friday so I can teach you how to do it, and we get to gist and spend time together. I am sure you would love it as much as I do. Please, let me know if you would be available. I look forward to hearing from you.

Your dear friend,

SOFIAT

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
A2 - Upper Beginner
Consider using more varied and advanced words.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

would: 3

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Task Response

The letter fully addresses all parts of the task. The candidate clearly explains what the hobby is, how it began, why it is enjoyable, and extends a clear invitation. The tone is appropriately informal and friendly, consistent with a letter to a friend. To further improve, the candidate could work on sentence structure to avoid 'comma splices' (joining two independent sentences with only a comma), but in terms of task achievement, the response is excellent.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter follows a logical progression and addresses all parts of the prompt. However, there is a frequent use of comma splices (joining two independent sentences with only a comma), which disrupts the flow. For example, 'It's crocheting, I have always wanted to learn it' should be two separate sentences or joined with a conjunction. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence is grammatically complete to help the reader follow your thoughts more smoothly.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is appropriate for an informal letter to a friend. Words like 'colorful yarns' and 'reduces my screen time' are used naturally. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated or precise vocabulary related to the hobby (e.g., 'intricate patterns' instead of 'different designs' or 'therapeutic' instead of 'keeps me busy'). Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The grammar is generally understandable, but there are several errors in sentence structure. The most prominent issue is the comma splice mentioned in the coherence section. Additionally, there are minor errors in article usage and phrasing (e.g., 'I saw few colorful yarns' should be 'I saw a few colorful yarns'). Focus on mastering complex sentence structures and ensuring that punctuation is used correctly to separate distinct ideas.

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