Band 4+: You recently moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to your landlord about a problem in the apartment. In your letter: • explain what the problem is • describe how it affects you • say what you would like the landlord to do

The letter addresses the task by describing problems (broken windows, damaged wardrobe), explaining effects (inability to sleep, security concerns, inconvenience), and suggesting action (hire experienced workers). However, there are some lapses: the description of problems is somewhat limited and could be more detailed; the explanation of effects is brief; and the suggestion is not fully developed (e.g., no mention of urgency or specific repairs). Additionally, there are frequent spelling and punctuation errors (e.g., 'appartment', 'wadrope', 'cloths', 'luggagges', 'incovinient', 'havent', 'i') and inconsistent capitalization, which affect clarity. To improve, provide more specific details about each problem, expand on how they affect you, and make clearer, more actionable suggestions. Proofread carefully to correct errors. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

The letter is generally organized with an opening, body, and closing, but the flow is disrupted by frequent grammar and phrasing errors. For example, 'however' is used incorrectly to connect two problems, and the progression of ideas is sometimes unclear. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect (e.g., one paragraph for problems, one for effects, one for suggestions) and use cohesive devices accurately (e.g., 'Additionally', 'As a result', 'Furthermore').

There is an attempt to use a range of vocabulary (e.g., 'detrimental', 'intruders', 'excessively'), but errors in spelling and word choice (e.g., 'wadrope' for 'wardrobe', 'cloths' for 'clothes', 'luggagges' for 'luggage', 'incovinient' for 'inconvenient') reduce clarity. Some phrases are awkward (e.g., 'hire experience workers'). To improve, proofread carefully and use a dictionary to check spelling and collocations. Expand your range with more precise terms (e.g., 'faulty windows', 'security risk').

There are numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'havent been fixed' should be 'have not been fixed'), missing punctuation (e.g., no comma after 'however', no capital letter for 'i'), and sentence structure issues (e.g., 'this may allow intruders break into' should be 'this may allow intruders to break into'). These errors often impede understanding. To improve, focus on basic grammar: subject-verb agreement, correct use of articles, and proper punctuation. Practice writing simple and compound sentences accurately before moving to more complex structures.