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Band 4+: You want to improve a local park. Write a letter to your local council suggesting improvements they could make. In your letter: - Describe the park - Explain why you think it needs improvements - Suggest what improvements they could make

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Dear sir/madam

I am writing this letter to concern about the local park that is nearby my home in livingston north-west of Calgary, to make some development in that for more leisure activities for kids and adults as well.

I am hoping if you can provide more swings and basketball or football nets to the park as they are predominant for kids to improve their skills and moreover, if you can add more garbage bins to the park will also be great so that there will be less mess and aids to keep park neat and clean.

According to me, these enhancements are good for children to gain more experience in games that are good for getting success and make the city proud, moreover, to make this park more beautiful by providing more bins for disposed garbage.

I hope you will consider my thinking and make these improvements to park.

Yours faithfully

Priyanka sharma

Word Count: 154

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Task Response

The letter adequately addresses the task by suggesting improvements to the local park. The reasons for the improvements, the types of improvements, and the beneficiaries are mentioned. To improve, provide more specific details about the benefits to different age groups and the community as a whole. Also, consider adding a stronger concluding statement that emphasizes the importance of the council's action.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat unclear, and the flow of ideas could be improved. Consider using more explicit transitions between your points to guide the reader. For example, when transitioning from the need for improvements to the specific improvements you suggest, a phrase like 'To address these needs...' could be helpful. Also, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance clarity.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but there's room for improvement in terms of precision and variety. For instance, instead of 'make some development,' you could use 'implement enhancements' or 'undertake renovations.' Similarly, consider more specific terms than 'leisure activities,' such as 'recreational facilities' or 'outdoor games.' Expanding your vocabulary range will make your writing more compelling and effective.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and proper article usage (a/an/the). For example, 'concern about' should be 'express my concern about,' and 'in livingston north-west of Calgary' needs rephrasing for better clarity. Reviewing basic grammar rules and proofreading carefully can help reduce these errors.

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