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Band 6+: You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter, say who are you give details about the accident suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

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Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Mr. Makram Shaker, and I work as a physiotherapist at the nearest hospital to your supermarket. I am writing to inform you about my facing an issue in your workplace.

Firstly, while I was shopping and collecting items and food what I needed for my week, the employee who works in the cheese department insulted me while I asked him for a block of cheese and bottle of milk. This situation began when I objected to taking them because the cheese was rotten, and milk was spoiled.

Secondly, thanks to my good luck, the general manager of the supermarket was walking close to the place of this dilemma. This person truly is respectful because he forced the worker to apologize to me immediately. Moreover, he insisted on paying the price as a real example of compensation.

Finally, I suggest that you should organize weekly meetings with your staff and discuss together about problems, either in this place or their own lives Due to the destructive effect of personal daily activities on individual’s actions. Therefore, it can easily lead to upgrade the quality of service of my favorite place for shopping.

I am waiting for your reply as soon as possible. If you have any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. Here is my mobile phone number: 0123456789.

Sincerely,

Makram Shaker

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Vocabulary Repetition:

cheese: 3

place: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the task requirements, describing an incident and offering a suggestion. However, the description of the accident is missing, and the focus is more on a customer service issue than a physical accident. The explanation of staff help is present but could be more detailed. The suggestion is relevant but could be more specific to supermarket safety. The language is generally clear, but there are some awkward phrases and grammatical errors. To improve, focus on directly addressing all parts of the task, providing specific details, and ensuring accurate grammar and vocabulary.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent, but the organization could be improved. The flow of ideas is sometimes disrupted by abrupt transitions. For example, the shift from the cheese department incident to the manager's intervention could be smoother. Consider using transitional phrases to connect ideas more effectively. Also, the final suggestion about weekly meetings feels somewhat disconnected from the initial incident. Try to tie your suggestions more directly to the specific event you described.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate but could be more precise and varied. Some phrases are a bit awkward or unnatural (e.g., "facing an issue in your workplace"). Aim for more natural expressions and a wider range of vocabulary to convey your message more effectively. For example, instead of 'insulted me,' you could use 'was rude to me' or 'treated me disrespectfully.'

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'food what I needed' should be 'food that I needed,' and 'Due to the destructive effect of personal daily activities on individual's actions' is grammatically awkward. Review basic grammar rules and sentence construction to improve accuracy. Pay close attention to punctuation as well.

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