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Band 4+: You wish to apply for a short-term internship at a marketing company in your city to gain experience before finishing your studies. Write a letter to the Human Resources Manager applying for the internship. You should include details about: - what kind of internship you are looking for - what you can offer the company during your stay - what you hope to learn from the experience.

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Hello, my name is Amir. The reason i am writing to Human Resources Manager right now, is – applying for the internship. There are a lot of incredible jobs and things, that i found interesting for me. Personally i am very ambitious and hardworking person, which would get to you a lot of advantages. First of all, as i used to study at Computer Science,i would like to work on the similar sphere. To say exactly – Cyber security – would definetly match with my character. I can guarantee you full-time of working and doing my best in this company.

The way of my interest in this company is simple. There are two reasons. At first – when i saw the advertisment of your company, i was at imaganative situation and my soul literally started to flex , knowing , that i could find the company which is definetly will be near to my soul , because of their impact. And for sure secondly – getting money, that is literally is the reason, which is help to hold the workers at their work.

In this company , the experience that i would got from this duration of job, will cost much more than other salaries. I hope to learn how to communicate with a lot types of people: rude or polite , and others characters. Mainly – discipline is the most valuable thing i will gain. I would like to take a part at a marketing company, for a summer duration.

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

would: 5

company: 5

which: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the content is often inappropriate for a professional job application. While you mention a department (Cyber security), a marketing company is unlikely to have a cyber security department for an internship, which shows a lack of logical connection to the task context. Furthermore, the reasons for wanting to join the company (mentioning 'getting money' and 'my soul started to flex') are unprofessional and unsuitable for a formal letter to an HR Manager. To improve, focus on maintaining a professional tone throughout. Instead of discussing money or emotional feelings, discuss the company's reputation, their specific marketing campaigns, or their market position. Ensure that your chosen department aligns logically with the type of company described in the prompt. Additionally, work on sentence structure and grammar to ensure your ideas are communicated clearly and formally.

Coherence & Cohesion

The organization of ideas is somewhat logical, following the bullet points provided in the task. However, the flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors. The use of transitions like 'First of all' and 'At first' is attempted, but they are not always used correctly in context. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is often inappropriate for a formal job application. Phrases such as 'my soul literally started to flex' and 'getting money' are highly informal and unprofessional for a letter to an HR Manager. Additionally, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'imaganative', 'definetly'). For a professional application, aim for formal business vocabulary (e.g., 'I am drawn to your company's reputation' instead of 'near to my soul', and 'financial compensation' instead of 'getting money').

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'the experience that i would got'), improper capitalization of the pronoun 'I', and issues with sentence structure (e.g., 'which is help to hold the workers'). To improve, practice subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and the proper use of relative clauses. Ensure that you use a formal tone consistently throughout the letter.

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