Band 4+: You wish to apply for a short-term internship at a marketing company in your city to gain experience before finishing your studies. Write a letter to the Human Resources Manager applying for the internship. You should include details about: - what kind of internship you are looking for - what you can offer the company during your stay - what you hope to learn from the experience.

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of these points is limited and sometimes inappropriate for a professional application. For example, mentioning a desire for a 'whopping salary' is unprofessional in a letter applying for an internship. Additionally, the candidate states they are looking for a 'part time job' when the task specifically asks for an 'internship.' To improve, focus on maintaining a professional tone throughout. Instead of focusing on personal financial gain, focus on how your academic background aligns with the company's needs. Ensure that the relationship between the points is logical; for instance, clearly explain how your current studies make you a good candidate for the specific internship you are seeking. Finally, pay closer attention to sentence structure and formal vocabulary to ensure the letter reads smoothly.

The letter follows a basic structure, but the progression of ideas is hindered by awkward phrasing and poor sentence construction. While you have addressed the three bullet points, the transitions between your current situation, your offer, and your goals are not smooth. To improve, focus on using standard transitional phrases (e.g., 'Regarding my background,' or 'In terms of what I can offer') and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular purpose.

There is an attempt to use some higher-level vocabulary (e.g., 'adhere,' 'interpersonal skills'), but many words are used incorrectly or misspelled (e.g., 'intership,' 'renowed,' 'volunter,' 'aquiant'). Some word choices are also inappropriate for a formal application, such as 'whopping salary,' which is too informal for a letter to an HR Manager. Aim for more precise, professional terminology and double-check the spelling of common academic and professional words.

Grammatical errors are frequent and often impede the reader's understanding. There are significant issues with sentence structure (e.g., 'This letter is being to written to you'), subject-verb agreement, and the use of conjunctions (e.g., starting a sentence with 'As' and then using 'so'). You should practice constructing simple and complex sentences correctly, paying close attention to verb tenses and the proper use of articles and prepositions.