Band 4+: 9. You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord's workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, state your reason for writing describe the problems and explain how you feel propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action

The letter addresses all three requirements of the task: the reason for writing is clear, the problem is described, and a solution is proposed. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The description of the problem is quite brief, and the explanation of the proposed solution could be more detailed to ensure full coverage of the task requirements. To improve, try to expand on the impact of the problem (e.g., how the cold temperature is affecting your studies or daily life) and provide a more formal or specific request for the solution (e.g., requesting a specific deadline for the replacement). Additionally, ensure grammatical accuracy in complex sentences to improve the overall flow. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

The letter follows the required structure by addressing the three bullet points, which helps the reader follow the intent. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed due to awkward phrasing. To improve, use more effective transition words (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical flow. The connection between the failed repairs and the proposed solution could be made smoother.

The vocabulary is functional but limited and occasionally used incorrectly, such as 'liquid cold' (which is not a standard English expression) and 'focus on to repair'. To reach a higher band, try to use more precise collocations and academic/formal vocabulary suitable for a letter to a landlord, such as 'persistent issue', 'ineffective repairs', or 'complete replacement'.

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('these two things needs'), incorrect verb tenses ('you had send', 'they are focus'), and improper sentence structure ('As you know, that we...'). Focus on mastering basic tense consistency and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed with correct subordinating conjunctions.