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Band 4+: The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The image depicts a bar chart with 3 groups of data (IBM, Microsoft, Apple) for 6 different years (1980, 1985, 1990, 1995, 2000, 2010); percentages on the y-axis range from 0% to 70% in 10% increments; IBM percentages for each year: 1980-5%, 1985-20%, 1990-25%, 1995-20%, 2000-15%, 2010-10%; Microsoft percentages for each year: 1980-0%, 1985-5%, 1990-10%, 1995-35%, 2000-30%, 2010-25%; Apple percentages for each year: 1980-10%, 1985-10%, 1990-5%, 1995-10%, 2000-15%, 2010-60%.

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Writing Task 1.

The following bar graph illustrates the involvement of men in senior development in IBM, Microsoft and Apple focusing time period of 30 years starting from 1980.

Overall, men working in Microsoft increases throughout the period while working in IBM was seen to be the least in starting and the highest at the end of period. Moreover, Apple follows the same trend as IBM but viceversa.

To begin with year 1980, men working at IBM was the least among three but with the time it was seen it rose gradually over the period and reached peaked in 2010. Talking about involvement of men in Microsoft, it was observed that there was gradual increasement over the period of time. But, in apple, there was highest participation of men in the starting of year among three banks which flucuate over time period and resulted on the least involvement in the final year i.e. 2010.

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

period: 6

involvement: 3

microsoft: 3

apple: 3

starting: 3

working: 3

least: 3

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Task Response

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Lexical Resource

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