Band 4+: The chart below shows the number of male and female students studying six art related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

The report attempts to address the task by comparing male and female student numbers across the six subjects, and it includes an overall statement. However, there are significant inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data. For example, the overall statement incorrectly claims that numbers rise dramatically to around 250 in English Language and Literature, and that the lowest numbers are around 50 in Philosophy, which is not supported by the data. The report also misreports specific figures for several subjects (e.g., Linguistics, Philosophy, History and Archeology) and includes vague or incorrect descriptions such as 'started from 170 to 240' and 'drop steadily at around 50 and 150'. Additionally, the report omits key data for some subjects (e.g., Art and Design) and introduces irrelevant or confusing trends. To improve, focus on accurately presenting the data for each subject, using clear comparisons, and ensuring that the overall summary reflects the main trends without overgeneralizing or inventing figures.

The report attempts to organize information but lacks clear progression and logical flow. The overall statement is vague and not fully supported by the data. Paragraphing is not effectively managed, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'While' and 'Whereas' are used incorrectly). The reader has to work to follow the intended comparisons. To improve, structure the report with a clear overview and then group related subjects logically, using appropriate linking words to show contrast and comparison.

The vocabulary range is limited and there are several inaccuracies and awkward phrasings (e.g., 'arts related to six different subjects', 'studying numbers', 'grow sharply', 'hit the highest point'). Some words are misused or misspelled (e.g., 'pholosphy', 'stud'). To improve, use a wider range of precise vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'accounted for', 'comprised', 'peaked at', 'was significantly higher than') and ensure correct spelling and word choice.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that significantly impede understanding. There are problems with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. For example, 'the percentage of male and female students rise dramatically' should be 'the numbers... rose', and 'the number of male and female students had the lowest' is incorrect. Many sentences are incomplete or run-on. To improve, focus on writing clear, grammatically correct sentences, using a variety of structures, and proofreading for common errors.