Band 4+: The maps below show the developments that have taken place in Whitehawk Country Park between 1980 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the main changes in the park, such as the reduction of the forest and the addition of new facilities. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions: it mentions 'houses for the residents' which is not in the visual description, and it does not mention the bridges over the river. The grammar and vocabulary contain errors (e.g., 'illustrates' should be 'illustrate', 'undergone' should be 'has undergone', 'dominanting' should be 'dominating', 'conaining' should be 'containing', 'expantion' should be 'expansion'). The report lacks a clear comparison between the two periods, and the final sentence is incomplete. To improve, ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct spelling, and provide a more balanced overview with specific comparisons. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction and an overview, but the body lacks clear paragraphing and logical progression. The description of changes is somewhat disjointed, and the final sentence is incomplete, which disrupts the flow. To improve, organize the information into clear paragraphs (e.g., one for the 1980 layout and one for the 2020 changes), and ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea. Use cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly, and avoid abrupt endings.

The vocabulary is adequate but limited, with some errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'dominanting' instead of 'dominating', 'conaining' instead of 'containing', 'expantion' instead of 'expansion'). There is some attempt to use descriptive language (e.g., 'substantial developments', 'suitable public roads'), but the range is narrow. To improve, use a wider variety of precise terms (e.g., 'encroached upon', 'expanded', 'relocated') and ensure correct spelling and word forms. Avoid informal or vague expressions like 'cutting off'.

The report contains several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('maps illustrates' should be 'maps illustrate'), incorrect verb forms ('undergone' should be 'has undergone'), and missing words ('conaining' should be 'containing'). There are also issues with articles and prepositions. The range of sentence structures is limited, with mostly simple sentences. To improve, practice using a variety of complex structures (e.g., relative clauses, passive voice) and proofread to correct basic grammar errors. Ensure all sentences are complete and correctly punctuated.