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Band 5+: You are current a student in Loren Bresque University. You want to apply to a post of Quality Assurance Manager, you saw in university's notice board. Write a letter to Mr. Walker and: 1. Why are you writing this letter 2. About your education 3. About your work experience and why you are suitable to this work

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Dear Mr. Walker,

I am writing to apply to (for) the position of Quality Assurance Manager, recently advertised on the university’s notice board.

My master degree I reached from Brno University of Technology Faculty of mechanical engineering and my touch with mechanical engineering I have got in Secondary School of Mechanical and Electrical Engineering Brno.

I have a lot of experience in the engineering industry. Especially from Secondary school. I have completed a large number of internships. I worked with: classic lathe, CNC lathe, multi-axis manual machining, CNC horizontal machining. Multi-axis CNC machining, cylindrical grinders and surface grinders.

Last time I worked in Fermat CZ as Quality Assurance deputy manager. I gained all of the manager skills and I am able to handle my department of quilty. If you want to invite me to an appointment contact me at the email address referred below. Thank you for your reply.

Best regards,

David Bily

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engineering: 4

manager: 3

mechanical: 3

machining: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the main requirements of the task: it states the reason for writing, provides some information about education and work experience, and explains suitability for the job. However, there are some omissions and lapses. The education section is not clearly linked to Business Administration, and the description of work experience, while relevant, lacks specific details about quality assurance responsibilities and achievements. The suitability for the role is only briefly mentioned. To improve, ensure all bullet points are fully developed, provide more specific examples of relevant skills and experiences, and clearly connect them to the job requirements. Also, proofread for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to enhance clarity.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter has a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. However, the flow is disrupted by abrupt transitions and a lack of logical linking between ideas. For example, the shift from education to work experience is sudden, and the final sentence about contacting you feels disconnected. To improve, use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'Moreover' to connect paragraphs and sentences smoothly. Also, ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic and that ideas are developed logically.

Lexical Resource

The letter uses some appropriate vocabulary related to engineering and quality assurance, such as 'internships', 'CNC lathe', and 'Quality Assurance deputy manager'. However, there are several inaccuracies and awkward phrasings, such as 'my master degree I reached from' and 'my touch with mechanical engineering'. To improve, use more precise and natural expressions, e.g., 'I obtained my master's degree from...' and 'I gained foundational knowledge in mechanical engineering at...'. Additionally, expand your range of vocabulary to include more formal and varied terms, and avoid repetition (e.g., 'I have' is used multiple times).

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. Examples include missing articles ('a master degree' should be 'a master's degree'), incorrect prepositions ('apply to' should be 'apply for'), and subject-verb agreement problems. There are also run-on sentences and missing commas. To improve, focus on sentence structure, use a variety of complex and compound sentences, and proofread carefully for common errors. Practicing grammar exercises and reviewing punctuation rules will help enhance accuracy.

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