Band 5+: You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: 1) Explain when and how long you will be in town. 2) Ask whether you can stay at their home. 3)Offer to pay for yourself.

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the task. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited, and there are several inaccuracies in phrasing and grammar that occasionally affect the clarity of the message. For example, the offer to pay is phrased awkwardly ('pay with you the bills of the food'), and the request to stay is slightly unclear ('if there space for me without annoying any one'). To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring that your sentences flow logically. Instead of 'I'm writing to inform you,' which is quite formal for a relative, try a more casual opening like 'I'm writing to let you know.' Additionally, ensure you proofread for basic errors such as capitalization (e.g., 'i' should be 'I') and spelling (e.g., 'planed' should be 'planned'). The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

The letter follows the required structure and addresses all three bullet points, which helps the reader follow the purpose of the letter. However, the transitions between ideas are somewhat abrupt. To improve, use more natural cohesive devices. For example, instead of 'At first,' which is usually used for sequences in an argument, use 'I am writing to let you know that...' or 'Regarding my travel plans...' to introduce new information. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

The vocabulary used is basic and functional, which allows the message to be understood, but it lacks the range and sophistication required for higher scores. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'the bills of the food of that days' and 'say with you' (likely intended as 'stay with you'). Try to use more natural collocations, such as 'cover my expenses,' 'share the grocery costs,' or 'split the bills.' Expanding your range of synonyms will help avoid repetition. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are issues with sentence structure (e.g., 'the city where do you live'), verb tense (e.g., 'I planed'), and capitalization (e.g., 'i', 'monday', 'wednesday'). There are also errors in preposition usage and word choice. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and practicing the use of relative clauses. Pay close attention to punctuation and the capitalization of proper nouns and the pronoun 'I'.