Letter

Band 5+: You are planning to organize a community event in your neighborhood, and you need support from the local council. Write a letter to the council. In your letter: - describe the event you are planning - explain why you think it would benefit the community - request specific support or resources from the council

See all user-written answers on this topic

Skyrocket your IELTS band score by 1-2 points in under a month with our premium plan!

Note: Both the topic and the answer were created by one of our users.

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to ask some help from you to organize a community event in my area. In conducting this event I need your assistance.

I am planing to held stress and anger management campaign on 10th october I want to give people information that can help them to minimize stressors.

I beleive that if the individuals know about stress management skills they can work effectively and perfom their life tasks. Stress is rising in the world and it can be mitigate by teaching individuals with stress management skills. Anger issues are also increasing in our community that causes to rise in fights and conflicts between individuals. The campaign can help them to control thier anger and teach the skills to talk with politeness.It will lower the fight rates in community.

I would be very greatefull if you could invite most experienced psychologist Dr. John to join this event and give knowledge to the people. I am looking forward to your prompt response.

Your’s Sincerely,

Sarah

Word Count: 170

Check Your Answer On This Topic?

Check My Answer

Generate A Band-9 Sample Answer?

Generate A Sample

Overall Band Score

(+/- 0.5)

Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
Opt for even more advanced words when appropriate.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

stress: 4

event: 3

anger: 3

management: 3

individuals: 3

skills: 3

Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response

The letter adequately addresses the task by describing the event, explaining its benefits, and requesting support. The content is relevant and logically organized. To improve, provide more specific details about the requested support and ensure consistent clarity throughout the letter.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally understandable, but the organization could be improved. Consider using more explicit transitions between the description of the event, its benefits, and the specific requests. Paragraphing is present but could be used more effectively to separate ideas. For example, the explanation of the event's benefits could be split into two paragraphs to discuss stress and anger management separately.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there's room for improvement. Using more precise and varied vocabulary could enhance the impact of your message. For example, instead of 'give people information,' you could use 'educate the community' or 'provide insights.' Also, 'minimize stressors' could be rephrased as 'reduce the impact of stressors.'

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Focus on improving sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and correct use of articles and prepositions. For example, 'I am planing to held' should be 'I am planning to hold,' and 'causes to rise in fights' should be 'causes a rise in fights.' Proofreading carefully before submitting can help catch these errors.

Answers On The Same Topic:

See All