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Band 7+: you have decided to leave your currer job and look for a new one . Write a letter to a friend . In your letter explain Why you want to leave your current job describe what kind of job you are looking for ask for some help or advice

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Dear Raman,

I am writing this letter as I am looking for a new role in my professional journey. I know you are wondering why I am looking for a new job? Since I was working for Canadian Tire, thoughts about my settled future were popping up in my mind, that made me decide, I should start my career in my field, hospitality. That’s why I chose to resign from the position of forklift operator, and find something in a hotel.

Unlike other occupations related hotel and restaurants, I am thinking of pursuing my career in the role of front desk manager as I have interest in it. I have quite good communication and leadership skills, which make me a perfect fit for this role. Apart from that, I have studied in my college diploma program, Hotel and Restaurant management, about the different functions and tasks which are done in a hotel on a daily basis.

What I want you to help me with is to provide me the contact details of the list of employment agencies that help in finding jobs, and assist in building up outstanding resumes. Should they help in find me a suitable occupation as per my interests, it will definitely contribute to my future success.

Kind regards,

Abhishek.

Word Count: 213

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

hotel: 3

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Task Response

The letter effectively addresses all three bullet points: it explains the reason for seeking a new job (career change to hospitality), describes the desired job (front desk manager), and asks for help (contact details of employment agencies). The tone is appropriate for a friend, and the content is relevant and sufficient. To achieve a higher score, ensure the request for help is more directly about job leads rather than just agency contacts, and consider a slightly more natural flow in the opening paragraph.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally well-organized and easy to follow. The purpose is clear, and each paragraph addresses a specific point from the task. However, there are minor lapses in cohesion, such as the abrupt transition from explaining the job search to describing the desired role. The paragraphing is adequate but could be more skillfully managed to improve flow. Consider using linking phrases like 'In addition' or 'Furthermore' to connect ideas more smoothly.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is appropriate and shows some range, with terms like 'professional journey,' 'pursuing my career,' and 'outstanding resumes.' However, there are instances of less natural phrasing, such as 'thoughts about my settled future were popping up in my mind' and 'make me a perfect fit.' To achieve a higher score, aim for more sophisticated and natural expressions, such as 'I began to contemplate my long-term career goals' or 'I believe I am well-suited for this role.'

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter demonstrates a good attempt at using a variety of sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect clarity. For example, 'that made me decide, I should start my career' should be 'which made me decide that I should start my career,' and 'Should they help in find me' should be 'If they can help me find.' Punctuation is mostly correct, but there are issues like the misplaced question mark in 'why I am looking for a new job?' To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct use of relative clauses, and proofreading for minor errors.

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