Band 4+: You live in a rented apartment. Recently, there has been a problem with the heating system in your building, and it is still not fixed despite your previous phone calls. Write a letter to your landlord, Mr. Thompson. In your letter: Describe the problem with the heating. Explain how this is affecting your daily life. State what action you expect the landlord to take and by when.

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of these points is limited and sometimes unclear. While you describe the problem (noise and low temperature), how long it has been an issue (since June 20th), and what you want (new equipment), the explanations are somewhat repetitive and the phrasing makes the requests difficult to follow. To improve, focus on the following: - **Clarity of Purpose:** Ensure your requests are direct. For example, instead of saying 'I would tell you whole situation,' simply state the facts clearly. - **Logical Flow:** Organize the letter so that the description of the problem leads naturally into the requested solution. - **Detail and Expansion:** Instead of just saying 'we were very afraid,' explain why (e.g., 'the loud banging noises suggested a mechanical failure'). This provides the 'details' requested by the prompt. - **Grammar and Sentence Structure:** Work on subject-verb agreement and the use of articles (e.g., 'the heating system' instead of 'heating system') to ensure your ideas are communicated smoothly. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

The organization of the letter is somewhat logical, following the bullet points of the task. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. To improve, use more effective cohesive devices (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', 'Therefore') to link your ideas smoothly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose and that the transition between describing the problem and proposing a solution is more fluid.

The vocabulary used is quite basic and, in several instances, inaccurate or used incorrectly (e.g., 'exchange or reinstall' without a direct object, or 'place properly' which is unclear in this context). To reach a higher band, aim to use more precise and sophisticated terminology related to housing and maintenance, such as 'malfunctioning,' 'insufficient heating,' 'professional technician,' or 'rectify the issue.' Avoid repetitive words and strive for more natural collocations.

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. Issues include verb tense consistency (e.g., 'home remain cold'), incorrect preposition usage, and sentence structure errors (e.g., 'I am writting this to inform you that our heating system has not been not working'). Focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and tenses. Practicing complex sentence structures will also help improve your score.