Band 4+: You recently stayed at a hotel and left an item of value behind. You have tried to call the hotel, but you were unable to get through to the right person. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letteR Provide details of your stay and the item you left behind. Explain what happened when you tried to call the hotel. Suggest how you would like the item to be returned to you.

The letter generally addresses the task by mentioning the item left behind (a bag with a camera and other goods), where it was left (in the room's storage area), and a request for help. However, there are several issues that detract from task achievement. The description of the item is vague ('my bag', 'my camera and other my goods'), and the explanation of where it was left is unclear ('room's storage area'). The request for help is implied but not clearly stated as a direct question or action request. Additionally, the letter contains irrelevant details (e.g., the mother's hospitalization) that, while providing context, are not necessary and may confuse the main points. To improve, focus on clearly describing the item (e.g., 'a black backpack containing a camera and personal documents'), specify the exact location (e.g., 'in the wardrobe of room 205'), and directly ask the manager to check lost property and arrange for return or collection.

The letter attempts to follow a logical sequence but is hindered by unclear phrasing and abrupt transitions. The message is difficult to follow in places due to missing connectors and awkward sentence structures. To improve, use clear paragraphing: one paragraph for describing the item, one for explaining where it was left, and one for the request. Use cohesive devices like 'First,' 'Additionally,' and 'Finally' to guide the reader.

The vocabulary is basic and often misused (e.g., 'inform about I forget,' 'goods all I take it out,' 'atmitted'). There is limited range and some repetition. To improve, learn and use more precise terms such as 'left behind,' 'belongings,' 'admitted to the hospital,' and 'retrieve.' Avoid informal or incorrect phrases like 'hurry up to checkout' and use 'check out' correctly.

The letter contains frequent grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms ('forget' instead of 'forgot'), missing prepositions ('inform about I forget'), and subject-verb agreement issues. Sentence structures are often incomplete or run-on. To improve, practice using past tense consistently, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct prepositions. Consider writing shorter, simpler sentences to reduce errors.