Bar Chart

Band 6+: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the percentage of children in a European country who took part in four kinds of activities in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. <

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The image contains a bar chart titled 'The percentage of children in four kinds of activities, 2009', comparing three age groups. Activity participation for 5-8 years old, 9-11 years old, and 12-15 years old respectively is as follows: Watch TV (~96%, ~80%, ~80%), Read comics (~62%, ~65%, ~65%), Play video games (~60%, ~57%, ~40%), and Ride bikes (~68%, ~62%, ~83%).

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The bar chart gives information about the proportion of children who chose to participate in four kinds of activities in a European country in 2009.

In general, it can be seen that watching TV accounted for the largest percentage in 5-8-year-olds, while in 12-15-year-olds, playing video games was the lowest contribution among the three activities.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, around 90% of children aged 5- 8 years watched television, followed by reading books and playing video games, with similar proportions of under 50%. Additionally, watching TV contributed the highest proportion for kids 9-11, whereas riding bikes and playing video games had similar contributions of just over 50% respectively.

Young people aged 12-15, however, preferred to ride bikes, which accounted for over 75%, and reading books recorded a moderate 50%. Playing video games had the least percentage, while watching television was in second place, at approximately 60% in 2009.

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

playing: 4

video: 4

games: 4

watching: 3

Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response

The report addresses the task and identifies some key trends, but there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting that affect the clarity of the comparison. For instance, the report mentions proportions of 'under 50%' for reading books and video games in the 5-8 age group, whereas the visual description indicates these were much higher (around 62% and 60%). Additionally, some comparisons are slightly confusingly phrased. To improve, ensure that the data cited closely aligns with the visual information provided and focus on grouping the data more logically to highlight the trends across the different age groups.

Coherence & Cohesion

The report is organized logically, moving from a general overview to specific age groups. The use of cohesive devices such as 'In general', 'Moving to a more detailed analysis', and 'however' helps guide the reader. To improve, ensure that the transitions between sentences within paragraphs are even smoother to avoid a slightly repetitive structure. The progression of ideas is clear, though the connection between the overview and the body paragraphs could be more tightly integrated.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for describing the data, using terms like 'proportion', 'accounted for', and 'moderate'. However, there is some repetitive use of words like 'contribution' and 'percentage'. Additionally, there are some slight inaccuracies in word choice, such as using 'contribution' to describe participation rates, which is more commonly used for financial or additive contexts. Aim to use a wider variety of synonyms for 'participation' or 'involvement' to enhance the sophistication of the report.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The report demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are some inconsistencies in grammatical accuracy and phrasing. For example, the phrasing 'similar proportions of under 50%' is slightly awkward, and the comparison 'playing video games was the lowest contribution among the three activities' is grammatically imprecise (an activity cannot be a contribution). Focus on ensuring that comparisons are grammatically sound (e.g., 'the percentage of children playing video games was the lowest') and pay close attention to prepositional usage.

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