Band 4+: The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report attempts to address the task and covers all categories mentioned in the visual description. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and logical consistency. The overview states that both countries had the highest proportion in 'no qualifications,' but the data provided for Malaysia (65%) and Singapore (60%) contradicts the comparative nature of the task, as Singapore's 'no qualification' rate is actually much higher than its other categories, while Malaysia's distribution is different. Furthermore, the report includes several inaccuracies regarding the specific percentages compared to the provided description. To improve, ensure that the overview accurately reflects the main trends (e.g., which country has higher levels of education overall) and double-check that the numerical data cited matches the visual information provided. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report follows a logical structure with an introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs. However, the cohesion is weakened by several grammatical omissions that disrupt the flow. For instance, in the overview, the sentence 'By contrast, had the lowest proportion...' lacks a subject, making it difficult to follow. To improve, ensure every sentence has a clear subject and use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'In terms of,' 'Regarding,' 'Conversely') to link ideas more smoothly.

The vocabulary used is functional but repetitive and occasionally inaccurate. Phrases like 'bay far the most percentage' are non-standard; instead, use 'the highest percentage' or 'the largest proportion.' There is also some awkward phrasing such as 'In terms of Malaysia science.' Aim to use more precise academic collocations, such as 'accounted for,' 'constituted,' or 'comprised,' and vary your descriptors for proportions (e.g., 'a significant majority,' 'a negligible amount'). Pay attention to vocabulary repetition to improve the overall score.

Grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, missing subjects in sentences, and incorrect preposition usage. For example, 'no qualifications in science was bay far the most percentage' is grammatically incorrect. You should focus on mastering sentence structures, particularly ensuring that every clause has a subject and a verb, and practice using complex sentences (e.g., using relative clauses like 'which' or 'while') to improve your range.