Letter

Band 6+: You recently attended a workshop that was organized by a local community center, but due to unforeseen circumstances, you had to leave early and missed a significant portion of it. Write a letter to the community center apologizing for your early departure. You should include details about: - why you had to leave unexpectedly - what part of the workshop you missed - how you plan to catch up on the missed information.

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Dear local community centre,

I am writing to express my apology for the early departure from a workshop that was organised by you.

As you had organised a workshop of clean and green environment on April 24th in order to spread awareness among individuals. I also attended that workshop as I am a nature lover and I wanted to gain knowledge regarding how I can contribute myself to save nature. However, during the time of workshop, I got a call from my mother, she informed me that my father was critically ill and he needed to be hospitalized. Therefore, I had to leave early.

The part I missed is the steps that can be implemented to make environment more cleaner and a healthier place to live which was going to be discussed during the time of speech, but because of my early departure, I missed it. Furthermore, to make up for the missed session, I consider about taking notes from my friend as he also attended this workshop and he had made notes of every step.

Please accept my heartfelt apology.

Yours Sincerely,

Sanjana

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

workshop: 5

missed: 3

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Task Response

The letter appropriately addresses all requirements of the task, providing a clear explanation for the early departure, identifying the missed portion of the workshop, and suggesting a way to compensate for it. The response is relevant and sufficiently detailed. To improve, consider adding more specific details to enhance the personal tone and engagement. For example, you could briefly mention your father's condition or elaborate on how you intend to apply the notes from your friend.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent, but the flow could be improved with better transitions between ideas. Consider using more varied cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs more smoothly. For example, in the second paragraph, the transition from attending the workshop to receiving the phone call could be smoother. In the third paragraph, the purpose of the workshop is not very clear. Also, avoid using simple conjunctions like 'and' repeatedly.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there's room for improvement in terms of variety and precision. Try to use more specific and descriptive words to convey your message more effectively. For instance, instead of 'gain knowledge,' you could use 'acquire insights' or 'deepen my understanding.' Also, avoid using the same words or phrases repeatedly.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Pay closer attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and article usage. For example, 'As you had organised a workshop' could be improved to 'As you organised a workshop'. Also, review the use of prepositions and ensure they are used correctly. Proofread carefully to catch and correct these errors.

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