Letter

Band 4+: You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter, say who are you give details about the accident suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

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Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Vidhi Sojitra and I am living at silver Heights apartment which is situated behind the supermarket.

Last week, I visited the supermarket and unfortunately, a bike rider hited me and I slept down. Immediately, someone called ambulance and reached me a near by hospital. Moreover, doctor said that one leg has minor fractured but nothing about worried.

However, this accident caused due to the limited space as streets are quite small and cart vandors often set up their stalls in an unorganised manner, which makes difficult for people to walk freely. Apart from this, several customers entered inside with their vehicles and parked it at the corner of the road, which block the street for other riders.

I suggested you that either replace the market to the another place or prohibited the vehicles inside the center.

I hope you understand my concern. Thank you for your attention.

Yours Faithfully,

Vidhi

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Overall Band Score

4.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

which: 3

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Task Response

The letter adequately addresses the task by providing the necessary information about the accident and suggesting preventative measures. However, the letter could benefit from more specific details about the accident's location within the supermarket and a more formal tone. To improve, focus on providing concrete details and maintaining a consistent level of formality throughout the letter.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat clear, but the flow of information could be improved. Consider using more effective transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance readability. For example, when transitioning from describing the accident to suggesting solutions, a clearer link could be established. Also, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve coherence.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is basic and lacks the precision needed to fully convey the details of the accident and the suggested solutions. Try to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to accidents, safety measures, and urban planning to add depth to your writing. For instance, instead of 'hited me and I slept down,' you could use 'collided with me, causing me to fall.' Also, avoid informal language.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Focus on improving sentence structure, verb tense consistency, and correct use of articles and prepositions. For example, 'one leg has minor fractured' should be 'one leg has a minor fracture,' and 'makes difficult for people' should be 'makes it difficult for people.' Proofread carefully to catch these errors.

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