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Band 4+: Your company is organizing a volunteer day at a local charity and you want to invite your colleagues to participate. Write an email to your colleagues inviting them to join the volunteer day. You should include: - the name and type of charity you'll be volunteering for - the date, time, and location of the volunteer event - what kind of activities they'll be involved in and what they should bring

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hi my colleagues!

i hope you’re doing well. guys my company decided to organize a volunteer day at a local charity. it is called “pumpkin day”, we have to introduce to people pumpkins, tell them for what they’re useful for, what vitamins do they contain and what dishes we can make with them. it’s going to start at october 20 and lasts till october 25. from 17:00pm every day, the event is on the northern avenue. so i was wondering if you can join us, i’m sure it’s going to be very interesting and we’re going to enjoy it. and if you come, you don’t need to bring with you anything, only try to wear something autumn themed.

cheers.

Jane.

Word Count: 120

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Vocabulary Complexity:
A2 - Upper Beginner
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

going: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all the requirements of the task, including the charity's name and type, the event's date, time, and location, and the activities involved. However, there are some minor omissions, such as not explicitly stating the type of charity (though it can be inferred). To improve, ensure all details are clearly and directly stated, and pay attention to formatting conventions for emails. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

Coherence & Cohesion

The overall message is understandable, but there are some issues with coherence and cohesion. The structure of the email could be improved by using clearer paragraphing and transitions between ideas. For example, separating the introduction, details about the charity, and the invitation into distinct paragraphs would enhance readability.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is generally appropriate, but there are instances of informal language that may not be suitable for a professional email. Phrases like 'guys' and 'cheers' could be replaced with more formal alternatives. Additionally, consider using a wider range of vocabulary to describe the activities and the charity to make the invitation more engaging. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are several grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses and sentence structure. For example, 'it's going to start at october 20 and lasts till october 25' should be corrected for consistency in tense. Additionally, the use of punctuation needs attention, particularly with commas and periods. A review of basic grammar rules and sentence construction would be beneficial.

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