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Band 4+: You have received a gift from a relative that you cannot use. You want to write a letter to thank them, but also delicately explain the situation. Write a letter to your relative. You should include: - Express your gratitude for the thoughtful gift. - Explain why the gift isn't suitable for you. - Suggest an alternative way they could help you or someone else.

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Dear uncle Sam,

I hope this letter finds you well and I am writing to express my gratitude to your valuable gift, which you gifted me in my birthday. Giving a branded laptop for me felt me find myself how am I value for you as It left me in deep sence of pride myself.

However, I already bought a new laptop by my own, because I really want to purse something from my own desire and I finally bought a new one as it more important me to continue my accademic purposes. Thus, believe having two laptops is a useless thing. Moreover, left a desktop without using could be lead to damage the inner part of it.

Furthermore, there is a poor girl in our class who have not enogh financial suport to buy a new desktop. But this student is good in education and she is worring about to persue a brand compter. I believe, if we can gifted her a new laptop which you gifted me, it will more appriciable effort, as it could really help to doing her studies well.

I am eagely waiting your prompt response. Best regards.

Ann

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Overall Band Score

4.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

gifted: 3

laptop: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all parts of the task and expresses gratitude, explains the unsuitability of the gift, and suggests an alternative. While the content is relevant, there are some awkward phrasings and grammatical errors that slightly detract from the overall quality. To improve, focus on using more natural and accurate language, and ensure sentences are clear and concise.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat clear, but the flow of ideas could be improved. The introduction expresses gratitude, the body explains the unsuitability of the gift, and a suggestion is made. However, the transitions between these points are not always smooth, and the reasoning could be clearer. Consider using more explicit transition words and phrases to guide the reader through your explanation and suggestion. For example, you could use phrases like 'In addition to this' or 'Therefore' to connect your ideas more logically.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is basic and sometimes inaccurate ('valuable gift,' 'sence of pride'). There are also instances of unnatural phrasing ('purse something from my own desire,' 'more important me to continue'). To improve, try to use a wider range of vocabulary and pay attention to collocations (words that naturally go together). For example, instead of 'valuable gift,' you could say 'generous gift' or 'thoughtful present.' Instead of 'purse something from my own desire,' you could say 'pursue something I desired.' Reading more English texts and noting down useful phrases can help expand your vocabulary and improve your phrasing.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses ('felt me find,' 'left a desktop without using could be lead'), subject-verb agreement issues ('there is a poor girl who have not enogh financial suport'), and incorrect word order. These errors significantly affect the clarity of the message. To improve, focus on mastering basic grammar rules and sentence structures. Review verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and correct use of articles and prepositions. Practicing writing simple sentences and gradually increasing complexity can help build a solid foundation. Proofreading carefully and using grammar-checking tools can also help identify and correct errors.

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