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Band 5+: You are organizing a charity fundraising event at your workplace and need to coordinate with your manager for approval and support. Write a letter to your manager, requesting permission and assistance for the event. You should explain: - The purpose and details of the fundraising event - The resources you will need from the company - How the event will benefit the company's image.

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Hi Dianne,

I am writing this letter in regards to the Fundraising event that is going to be held at our nursing home in Marmora.

The fundraising is planned to allocate funds for the local non-profit organization, MNC to support the local farmers, whose fields are affected by the devasting hailstorm.For the event, a commitee has made to look after the funds and other need of the event, and I have given the role of secretary for the commitee.

The event will last for a week from dec 1 to dec 8 at the downtown Church, and folks can also donate via website, . Also, the finalcial secretary, Daniel will look after for the funds and the amount collected will transparently available to the public at hte website. To lift up the morale of the residents, it is decided that whoever will donate will be rewarded with a small trophy and certificate of appreciation.

For now, we are only 4 people , Daniel, Andrew, Smith and myself. We do need more volunteers to raise more awareness about the event, as we are thinking to organise a small parade. I twill be much appreciated if you make a post on your socials, about this.

Looking forward for a positive action from your side.

Warm Regards

Ramneet Kaur

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

event: 5

funds: 3

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Task Response

The letter adequately covers the requirements of the task, explaining the purpose, date, time, and location of the fundraising event, and mentioning the need for resources and assistance. However, there are some areas for improvement. The letter could benefit from more specific details regarding the resources needed from the company and other employees. Additionally, the tone could be more formal and professional, considering it's addressed to a manager. Some sentences are also a bit awkward and could be rephrased for clarity.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter generally conveys the purpose of the fundraising event, but the organization could be improved. Consider structuring the letter with clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance readability. For example, dedicate a paragraph to the event's purpose, another to the date, time, and location, and a final one to the resources needed. Transition words could also be used to link ideas more smoothly.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there's room for improvement in using more precise and varied language. For instance, instead of 'look after the funds,' you could use 'manage the finances' or 'oversee the financial aspects.' Expanding your vocabulary range will make your writing more engaging and professional.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and article usage ('a,' 'an,' 'the'). For example, 'a commitee has made' should be 'a committee has been formed.' Proofreading carefully and using grammar checking tools can help reduce these errors in future writing.

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